What is a haiku? let's play with form! Dürfen wir mit formular spielen!

[invisibleplanet]

Haiku ist ein japanisches Formular von Poesie, was im Allgemeinen (aber nicht immer) aus 17 Silben besteht, es schreibte gewöhnlich innerhalb von drei Linien.

Haiku is a Japanese form of poetry generally (but not always) consisting of 17 syllables, usually within three lines,

die erste Zeile mit fьnf Silben,
die zweiten mit sieben
und die dritten hat einmal fьnf.

*with the first line containing five syllables,
the second seven,
and the third five again.


Traditionelles, haiku enthalten ein " kigo ", ein Jahreszeitwort und sollten zwei kontrastierende Teile, mit in einem 'Ausschnitt Wort ' oder, in grammatik, in einem Bindestrich oder in einem Doppelpunkt am Ende der ersten oder zweiten Zeile darstellen, den Ausschnitt zu zeigen.

*Traditional haiku contain a "kigo", a season word, and should form two contrasting parts, using a 'cutting word' or, in English, a hyphen or colon at the end of the first or second line to show the cutting.

[ Ecke des Pedants: AusschlieЯlich sprechend, Thematisch, [ Politik, laufende Geschдfte ] haiku genannt werden senryuu heissen - sie beschдftigen mit Themen anders als Natur und die Jahreszeiten und neigen, zum 5/7/5 Formular stдrker enzuhalten. ]

*[Pedants' corner: Strictly speaking, topical [politics, current affairs] haiku should be called senryuu - they deal with subjects other than nature and the seasons and tend to hold more strongly to the 5/7/5 form.]

ein paar Links:

SciFaiku (http://www.scifaiku.com/index.html)
Links zu Haiku Sites (http://my.execpc.com/~ohaus/haiklink.htm)

O.K.! ist so hier einer meiner Versuche

durch kalte Boden
der vorbote des Fruehling
stiess aufwaerts zum Licht


and my attempts in english..

spring comes into sight
shoots push their way through cold soil
stretch towards the light

and another: (not seasonal)

i looked in your eyes
and saw myself reflected
in a strange disguise

please have a try :!

[Sheridan]

wrote these in class the other day.

scatter brain am I
now physical modeling
showed it self to me

ready to finish
dc is calling my name
I want to go home

body is asking
me to stop what I'm doing
need to take a break

--


where is my haiku partner in crime??
tone...?

[invisibleplanet]

seasonal haiku

dreams turn to daylight
dawn chorus and autumn leaves
dripping heavy dew

senryuu

super_collider:
smashing particles of sound
'tween magnetic ears

[wocek]

morning @ work not in mood...

fire gently kills
both within the temple
swifty since the rain

hazy escalates precipice
whenever joins alas
yonder in an island

grass joyous rupples
as often one blue shapes are
sweeps abondoned brook

[wheezer]

study read study
books loaded with data, oi!
no sleep till brooklyn

[thetonewrecker]

eyelids raise at dawn
lips mutter a single swear
must head off to work

[Sheridan]

waitng for the disc
has tonewrecker sent them yet
waiting to play games

lol

[thetonewrecker]

colecovision
this emulator is done
nintendo eludes

[pille'ocheoni]

a ripe autumn tree
grand tonal polination
seasonal query dew

[Sheridan]

Originally posted by thetonewrecker
colecovision
this emulator is done
nintendo eludes

so now I can see
I need to wait a bit more
I can be patient

[wheezer]

do you people play
the mame, god of emus?
roms are plentiful

[invisibleplanet]

sonorous sibyl
surreal and so real
high hat in my teeth

[pille'ocheoni]

flat tweened object
keyed frame moving with design
frustrated action

[invisibleplanet]

flashing frustration
frame layers conceal the key
a 2 b, i c

[invisibleplanet]

expecting nothing
self fulfilling prophecy
nothing comes to you

[Sheridan]

notice this once more
her smell has trapped me again
I am lost within.

[Sheridan]

it is time for beer
celebrate my friends birthday
watch the weather change.

[invisibleplanet]

made new picture of
favourite techno dj
would u like to see?

[thAPUrpoSe]

No need for this crap
Too many rules mean less choice
For creative folk

:!

[thetonewrecker]

some pictures are good
others recall memories
techno dj yeah

[invisibleplanet]

all trapped within form
restriction is freedom here,
and freeform a gaol.

we create our art
not through lack, want or need, but
because we desire

²tone
picture's in the post
rejuvenated by my
idealistic eye

[Sheridan]

Originally posted by thAPUrpoSe
No need for this crap
Too many rules mean less choice
For creative folk

:!

rules can tie you down
or make you see things from a
different angle

[thetonewrecker]

meant to be broken
another cliche' for life
wisely use limits

[thetonewrecker]

pitter and patter
you can hear raindrops splatter
what does it matter

[invisibleplanet]

Haiku poetry
can envelop and embrace
Within it's constraints

[thetonewrecker]

unconscious reply
words fly by with a shy sigh
rye bread for this guy

[thetonewrecker]

motley crue haiku
heavy metal highway here
def leppard one arm

[thetonewrecker]

go run to the hills
tortured with Iron Maiden
Eddie was mascot

[thetonewrecker]

Judas Priest caring
even Scorpions sharing
not "we are the world"

[thetonewrecker]

a rat who plays chess
a turtle who wears dresses
confusion so deep

[thetonewrecker]

wasting lunchbreak now
longing for more snow outside
jammed thumb from boarding

[invisibleplanet]

written by a friend [http://worCOhOLic.uboot.com]worCOhOLic[/url]

music was my first
and seems to be my last love
just a dj's life

in me is hunger
just to live not so alone
i can't wait longer

if you only see
what you just don't want to see
then dont look at me

and by me..

tonewrecker rolling
haiku form from freest thought
proliferate prose

*g

[thetonewrecker]

music is a love
be it gentle, raw, fun, deep
requires your time

[thetonewrecker]

continually
push it away or pull it close
continually

[thetonewrecker]

IP has the love
everyone is born with it
some choose to ignore

[thetonewrecker]

a bird chirps nearby
others hear nature, but me
programmed step pattern

[thetonewrecker]

software will convert
audio wav to midi
bird becomes sequence

[thetonewrecker]

in studio now
bird sequence loaded in box
others want to sing

[thetonewrecker]

wire maze not cage
carries info to others
quantize, not today

[thetonewrecker]

stacked polysynth burps
drums decide to join in now
but where is the bird?

[thetonewrecker]

sequence joins complete
burn the cd, go mobile
now my car awaits

[thetonewrecker]

drive down to the park
finding bird I share with it
his new "voice" from me

[thetonewrecker]

bird seems amused here
music gurgles and buzzes
birds voice so full now

[thetonewrecker]

I wave at the bird
maybe we made connection
he shits on my car

[invisibleplanet]

alone, on the web,
drops of sensitivity
embrace an eyelash

dead chrysanthemum
yet - isn't there still something
remaining in it?

from http://www.toyomasu.com/haiku/

[thetonewrecker]

one peaceful image
inhabiting your calm mind
begging your visit

[thetonewrecker]

chrysanthemum damn
this is one of seven words
made Webster wealthy

[invisibleplanet]

amend the mistake
remove the indefinite
a return to rule

[invisibleplanet]

journey to the source
well of creativity
know well the way there

[thetonewrecker]

edit mine as well
I am glad you caught it too
fixing mistakes good

[thetonewrecker]

everyones brain craves
a chance to be pushed, challenged
prevent atrophy

[invisibleplanet]

is there wealth in words?
depth of phrase and imagery
induce free visions

[thetonewrecker]

sweep the floor, sideways
watch tv from back with mirror
write with other hand

[invisibleplanet]

words can bring disease
beware linguistic virii
transmitted by memes

[Sheridan]

it is time for food
my body needs energy
yet I need to wait
-----

if you face heaven
your trumpet will sound the best
jesus holds your key
-----

my gas tank screams E
scrounge up money to make full
I still smell of fuel.
-----

tonewrecker is back
he has dropped the haiku bomb
blowing up the spot

[Sheridan]

used to shave my head
now my hair's been growing back
noticing more grey

[thetonewrecker]

grey hair no worry
fun to post back in a hurry
jab haiku flurry

[thetonewrecker]

IP Sheridan
two posting fools join in here
verbal six leg race

[thetonewrecker]

Use comb on your hair
better as many toothpicks
fun, yet efficent

[thetonewrecker]

nanoloop gameboy
jam the 8 bit little sound
mine will be here soon

[thetonewrecker]

typing with my thumb
in it's sprained state always makes
me chuckle in pain

[Sheridan]

I drive ford escort
one morning my window smashed
theres nothing to steal

[Sheridan]

I am twenty three
yet I still get acne spots
maybe I'm sixteen?!?

[invisibleplanet]

tendon connection
who could have thought that pathways
were so intertwined?

[thetonewrecker]

co workers can bite
words linked into a great jaw
beaver teeth through bark

[Sheridan]

let me be a pest
greedy am I for new games
whats up tone wrecker?:-p

[thetonewrecker]

tendon cut on glass
breaking into empty Ford
one stone and two birds

[thetonewrecker]

pests are successful
colecovison comes now
nes will wait

express mail comes quick
you could sit by your mailbox
cracker jacks winner

[invisibleplanet]

i am thirty six
does age really matter?
i feel far older

[Sheridan]

nothing to do now
I will spend time here, with my
dope no-future friends.

:illin:

[thetonewrecker]

bah! I am thirty
still can play with 5 year old
or can converse with men

[thetonewrecker]

age label is dumb
learn and have fun, but stay young
we are versatile

[Sheridan]

I apreciate
generosity, I will
send you my mixed disc

[Sheridan]

waldorf I have got
building studio slowly
techno will come soon

[invisibleplanet]

no-future is here
now present moment slips past
and now becomes then

[thetonewrecker]

friends network, learn more
branch out, world gets smaller too
war then less likely

[thetonewrecker]

forget the mix disc
give me the Waldorf instead
laughing from my joke

[Sheridan]

I break six hundred
my fingers do the talking
thats why no girlfriend

[invisibleplanet]

versatile with style
sit a while and while away
prime time with some rhyme

[thetonewrecker]

I am or Ich bin
my german speaking skills gone
damn damn damn damn damn

[Sheridan]

paul I wish I could
but this toy is mine to have
not that fair of trade

:D

[invisibleplanet]

i will or ich werde
what one has learnt is not lost
ich is ish not ick

[Sheridan]

I think servers full
paul's avatar does not work
haiku overload

[thetonewrecker]

I know Ian, I know
I'm off to a meeting now
fun time here today

[Sheridan]

winter is coming
tonewrecker has cool sweatshirts
think I'll pick some up!

I like tone's designs
I will be walking billboard
displaying techno

[invisibleplanet]

it's been fun so have
a productive meeting - try
not to speak haiku *g

[invisibleplanet]

Originally posted by Sheridan
winter is coming
tonewrecker has cool sweatshirts
think I'll pick some up!

I like tone's designs
I will be walking billboard
displaying techno

where can i find them?
show them to me quickly now
i need some new clothes

[Sheridan]

here is the address
there's nifty things to buy here
don't spend all your dough!


www.cafepress.com/tonewrecker

[Mercedez Ben]

butt cheese on dry toast
burnt to poopy perfection
you take the first bite

[invisibleplanet]

cartoon alum mouth
puckered like some baboons ass
let's send for take-out

[invisibleplanet]

say! what time is it?
here one time, there another
it's all the same now

[Sheridan]

no new toy for me
mars music: all deals are gone!
day late dollar short!

[invisibleplanet]

nil desperandum!
dreams survive disappointment
so all is not lost

[invisibleplanet]

finding url
erutoaudiotech
MOTU do Haikus (http://www.no-future.com/vbulletin/showthread.php?s=&threadid=994)